I love that feedback too! Now I can't decide which one I like better! I like parts of both. When I was first writing this poem, I was actually going for a more fable/folkloric quality. The only thing I didn't like looking back at the first version was Stanza 4. It just felt awkward since the rest of the poem is so focused on the Devil. Idk, what do you think? As for the added modifiers, I was usually told in my creative writing classes in college that more specificity is better than less because it helps paint a clearer picture. I guess I still kinda struggle with knowing when to be super descriptive and when not to be. I would love some pointers! I'm Catholic (not hardcore or anything though, just casual), but I also enjoy playing around with religious themes and spinning them around to make them more universal rather than tied to one specific theism. I have another poem I might drop in here that is somewhat similar to this one in that it explores a being heavily associated with religion and attempts to make it into just a human story. It's one I've submitted multiple times but consistently received rejections on. Would that be alright, or is two poems too many? I'm truly incredibly grateful to be able to chat with people who love writing and poetry as much as I do, but I don't want to come off as too much lol.