Hey! So my first thought on this piece is that the language is formal but strangifying—and I can’t tell if you’re going really hard / leaning into describing something mundane (like waiting for a bus?) or describing something actually supernatural. I guess, then, the question is, do you care about being understood on a narrative level or are you going for mostly mood alone? I like the grounding elements—leaf litter sounds especially. As for the last line, I like it, but I might consider cutting “maybe” just to enhance the impact. Hope this was in some way helpful!!